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Intimacy

Ross · 2008-08-14T04:42:13Z

I lay next to him, staring at the perfect, masculine concave of his torso. The sand is cool against my naked hip and the lukewarm water laps at my feet. I stroke the muscles of his back, my fingers turning silver—thanks to the full moon—as they curve around his waist. “Six days,” I whisper. There’s no answer but the soft applause of water against sand. My hand traces the curve of his hip, his thigh. My thumb brushes coarse hair and I hear a ragged intake of breath. I slide my arm over his front and snuggle close to him. “We’ve known each other six days,” “Do you count the number of days since you’ve met your lover when you have sex with him?” I feel the reverbrating of his ribs as he murmurs the question. I chuckle, “No. I—I just haven’t fallen this hard since…ever.” This time, he’s the one to express amusement. He turns over to face me and I press myself against him, desperate for his warmth, his comfort. Against the insults that will surely come. “They don’t know about me,” I confess against the column of his throat. I dare to peer up at his probing blue eyes. “About my attraction to the same sex.” His eyes spark, “I’m the only one who knows,” Not a question. A statement. I correct him, “Lily knows. I told her when I graduated two months ago.” “From high school?” he asks. I nod. He swears, the curse echoing across the beach. “You’re younger than I thought.” “I’m not naïve, Andres,” I tell him. “I’m far from innocent,” A sigh, a whispered, “I wish you weren’t.” Then his lips pucker against mine, as soft as the water is wetting my skin. My drowsiness appears in that instant and I roll him on his back, already feeling his arousal against my belly. We lose ourselves in an electrifying kiss and I sigh as he pulls me closer, drowning myself in the passion. Wanting this intimacy to last forever.

dreamwriting2611

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Wed Oct 26, 2011 8:02 pm

dreamwriting2611 says... · Wed Oct 26, 2011 8:02 pm

This is the third story, i think, that I have read on here that it is brilliant. It made me feel like crying, a lot of the romantic short stories I have read on here have made me feel that way. Your writing is very good. I wish to read more of this, please.

You are worth every breath that I breathe, every beat of my heart. I would give my last breath to tell you that I love you.

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Sat Oct 29, 2011 1:40 pm

Faery007 says... · Sat Oct 29, 2011 1:40 pm

I liked this. Maybe it was just me but I found it obvious that it was a same-sex paring. It was sensitive and done in a mature manner. The grammar was all correct and the structure seemed good. The only thing I would say is maybe give the characters a bit more description. Not the sex of the character, but rather the thoughts. Make it rich in detail and maybe have a stream of consciousness going on somewhere in there - right at the beginning in italics maybe? Otherwise, it was really nice. I look forward to reading some more of your work in the future. Keep writing.

Hayley.

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I lingered round them, under that benign sky: watched the moths fluttering among the heath and harebells, listened to the soft wind breathing through the grass, and wondered how any one could ever imagine unquiet slumbers for the sleepers in that quiet earth.
— Emily Bronte, Wuthering Heights

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