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Berry · 2008-08-09T20:17:28Z

READERS: Imagine Bella and Edward sitting on a couch in a cozy room. Bella is sitting on his lap facing him. There’s nobody in the room except them. It’s very, very dark and quiet except a nearby clock ticking. ******************* Edward took my hand and gently squeezed. “Isabella Marie Swan. I love you so much.” He whispered in my ear. His sweet breath tickled on my skin. I leaned close to his ear, my cheek brushing against his. My skin tingled. “How much?” I challenged. He turned his head ever so slowly so his lips brushed against mine. I closed my eyes with pleasure. Then he wrapped his arms around my lower back and buried his face in my shirt. For a moment, we sat like that. The clock nearby ticked with every passing second. Suddenly Edward lifted his head and kissed my neck. I leaned forward to kiss him back but he held me with resistance. I stared at him. “Bella, “ He said. His voice sounded like he was in pain. “I love you. I want you to always remember that.” Confused and a bit panicked, I wrapped my arms around his neck and this time buried my face into his shirt. It smelled so wonderful. “Edward,” I said. “There’s something you’re not telling me.” Silence. I lifted my head. “Please?” I begged. Edward stared at me for a second. Then his eyes dropped to where his fingers were nervously playing with the hem of my shirt. I put my hand over his. “Edward, please.” He hesitated for a second. “I’m afraid of you leaving me.” He whispered it ever so softly that I almost didn’t hear. Almost didn’t. I gasped, flinched and then winced, as if hit by a large stone. Tears welled in my eyes involuntarily. Edward looked at me his face full of agony as if even saying the words were too painful for him. “Edward,” I struggled to say, though my breathing was quickening and it was hard to breathe. I shook my head “No, no, no!” And now the tears poured uncontrollably, like rain from the clouds. Edward put both his hands on either side of my head. I sniffed and waited for him to say something. He didn’t. My sadness quickly turned to anger. “Why would you even say that?” I said. Silence again. “Edward Anthony Cullen, “ I spat. “Don’t make me force it out of you.” Once again, his eyes dropped to the hem of my shirt. “Alice.” This time I gasped, flinched, winced and clapped my hand to my mouth. “You m-mean…she saw?” “Yes.” “No, ” I shook my head. It can’t be true. No. Never. “No, “ I repeated. “It can’t be true. I’ll never let it happen. I would rather die.” Edward looked at me. I almost cried when I saw pain in his eyes. Now I put my hands on each side of his head. I closed my eyes thoughtfully. When I opened them again, Edward was still staring at me. “Edward,” I said. “You are the reason I live. You are the reason I breathe, the reason I sleep. The reason I get up in the morning. You are the reason my heart beats. Without you, I am nothing. Do you understand? Nothing. I was put in the World for one purpose. You” Edward winced. “Bella, don’t say that. How can you love me so much? How can anyone love me so much?” I couldn’t take it anymore. I put my face on his so my forehead was touching his. I closed my eyes. My hands shook, but I didn’t remove them from Edward’ head. I couldn’t see the clock in the room, as it was so dark but I knew Alice would be coming to pick us up soon. And then I remembered a movie I seen 5 years ago. Without hesitating, I spoke. “May my breath find shelter in your heart, “ I said. “May my life be destroyed in your love.” Edward gasped and looked up. I slowly put his hand on my heart. “I love you more than you know Edward. Please believe and never forget.” A car honked outside. Alice was here. **************

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Sun Oct 18, 2009 6:07 pm

AlphaGirl01 says... · Sun Oct 18, 2009 6:07 pm

I loved this. I especially loved the romantic aspect of it. You really showed her love for Edward and vice versa. I did spot one grammatical mistake though:

Edward looked at me his face full of agony as if even saying the words were too painful for him.

You need to put a comma after me and another one after agony. Otherwise, this was a really good fanfic. Definitely try and write more like this.

Last edited by AlphaGirl01 on Mon Nov 02, 2009 12:40 am, edited 1 time in total.

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Sat Oct 31, 2009 12:52 am

nee96 says... · Sat Oct 31, 2009 12:52 am

That was really good.

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