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Good, I liked the length But I do felt it was kind of rushed. For example:

To leave or not to leave, that is the question...?

Cain’s exit was very abrupt and unexpected. You need to help us out there but going into Eve’s thoughts on the matter. Was she angry? Sad? Or was this usual behavior from him? You have to give us at least a little bit of insight here.

The festivities have begun!

I do think the party was rushed. You else arrived besides the aunt?? Was it just the parents that was apart of her immediate family?? Stuff like that need to be answered so the reader can absorb him/herself into the moment.

Okay, time for individuals:

Inviting to many would be too much but just enough would be perfect.

Missing an “o”. It should be “too” instead of “to”.
Also here, I think you could elaborate more on her thoughts.

“Well I better get started.”

Comma after “well”

Pushing up my exhausted body up to my room, I thought about what I was going to wear.

Cut off the first “up”. Otherwise, it doesn’t make sense.

The black dress felt right as showed every curve of my body.

Add the word “it” between “as” and “showed”

Suddenly Lily took my hand and placed within Cain's grasp.

Add the word “it” after “and”

“You look stunning Eve.”

Comma after “stunning”

“Thank You Cain.”

Comma after “you” and no need for the “you” to be capitalized.

“Shh.” He said softly in my ear while also saying those soft whispers.

Comma instead of a period after “Shh”
And a small “h” on “he”

We immediately pulled away to the voice of my father Charles and my mother Jane.

Comma after “father” and “mother”

Other than that, this was good, as usual

I’ll keep my eyes open for more!

ummm...its seem kind of rushed to me for some odd reason. maybe slow down the reunited of cain and Eve a bit, explain it a bit more. I dunno. i am not good at this kind of thing. but i do like the plot. Lost love being reunited. it's good.

well, good luck with the rest. i'm off to read the other chapter.

I’m really enjoying this & I really can’t think of anything really major for improvement. The word document points out a few grammatical & wording errors & I also felt that this chapter was a little rushed. I think you should add more descriptions of the house at the start as there isn’t a very clear picture being painted here of your surroundings & add a bit more to the party & arrival of the family & when Cain & Eve are re-united. But, apart from that there’s nothing more I can think of!! I’m off to read the next …
Lucyy xx