A New Light on a Distant Shot

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Last edited by myfreindsavamp on Sat Nov 01, 2008 5:44 pm, edited 1 time in total.
We've all been broken in some way. It's just how we express it that makes us dffrent form eachother.

“This precious book of love, this unbound lover,
To beautify him only lacks a cover.”
~William Shakespeare, The Tragedy of Romeo and Juliet




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Last edited by myfreindsavamp on Sat Nov 01, 2008 5:45 pm, edited 1 time in total.
We've all been broken in some way. It's just how we express it that makes us dffrent form eachother.

“This precious book of love, this unbound lover,
To beautify him only lacks a cover.”
~William Shakespeare, The Tragedy of Romeo and Juliet




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It's real good. No mistakes that I can see, and you conveyed the characters' feelings well.
"The one thing you can't trade for your heart's desire is your heart."
Miles Vorkosigan

"You can be an author if you learn to paint pictures with words."
Brian Jacques




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Last edited by myfreindsavamp on Sat Nov 01, 2008 5:46 pm, edited 1 time in total.
We've all been broken in some way. It's just how we express it that makes us dffrent form eachother.

“This precious book of love, this unbound lover,
To beautify him only lacks a cover.”
~William Shakespeare, The Tragedy of Romeo and Juliet




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Last edited by myfreindsavamp on Sat Nov 01, 2008 5:46 pm, edited 1 time in total.
We've all been broken in some way. It's just how we express it that makes us dffrent form eachother.

“This precious book of love, this unbound lover,
To beautify him only lacks a cover.”
~William Shakespeare, The Tragedy of Romeo and Juliet




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Last edited by myfreindsavamp on Sat Nov 01, 2008 5:47 pm, edited 1 time in total.
We've all been broken in some way. It's just how we express it that makes us dffrent form eachother.

“This precious book of love, this unbound lover,
To beautify him only lacks a cover.”
~William Shakespeare, The Tragedy of Romeo and Juliet




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Last edited by myfreindsavamp on Sat Nov 01, 2008 5:47 pm, edited 1 time in total.
We've all been broken in some way. It's just how we express it that makes us dffrent form eachother.

“This precious book of love, this unbound lover,
To beautify him only lacks a cover.”
~William Shakespeare, The Tragedy of Romeo and Juliet




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From what I can read here, your story seems to have a great idea. It's unique, and the characters seem dynamic and able to convey feelings well in a refreshing manner. Your characters are not at all lifeless dolls. It's nice.




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It was a good read... cool.
Always looking for a good book to read.




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Last edited by myfreindsavamp on Sat Nov 01, 2008 5:48 pm, edited 1 time in total.
We've all been broken in some way. It's just how we express it that makes us dffrent form eachother.

“This precious book of love, this unbound lover,
To beautify him only lacks a cover.”
~William Shakespeare, The Tragedy of Romeo and Juliet



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