KABOOM!

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well, brother, i put off reviewing this for a while because i wasn't sure what i would say.
but i think i got it down to the main points.

this was a fun, energetic piece. i too do not think it is much of a poem at all, but i already told you that in person.

i know that you wrote this aroud the same time that i wrote my anti-fireworks poem (after we saw that one show). and i can't help but wonder, did you steal my idea?

i asked you what rhymed with...i can't remeber what during the fireworks show and you asked me if a was thinking up a poem.
did that get you going? am i an inspiration? haha. i'm kidding.
this is a totally original piece--poem or not--and i can see that a lot of people enjoyed it.

nice work.

-GC10
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KaaaaaaaBOOM!

"Fireworks!" "YAY!"

BOOM!

BOOM!

FWISSSSsssshhhh.

"OOH!" "AAH!"

BAM!

bambam.

BOOOcccrrrackllle.

EEEEEEEEEeeeeePOOF!

BOOM!

BOOM!

FWISH!

FWISH!

RRRRRRRAAAA...

BAM!!!

sssssssssshhhhhhhhh.

"YAY!"


all i have to say is wow, simply wow

further more i can't believe you spent 150 points on this, ah well i liked it though it was funny :D
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Um... wow? Kind of random but I loved it! GOLD STAR! You have some pure talent! It makes the reader happy and joyful!!! Yeee! And maybe a little hyper, too. You truly deserve a gold star... I hope to see more of your work. :D
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Thanks! :D
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