Blackbeards tale

all gather close,

all gather near!

I have a great story

I want you to hear!

The tale is of Blackbeard

a mighty pirate was he

the story begins in England

time of Queen Ann's war, you see

Edward Teach

was kind and loyal

worked in the navy

and obeyed the royals

then one day

his soul went bad

his heart evil

and his mind mad.

He sailed across sea

looking for more

but he got greater

then what he bargained for.

he saw ships

crashed and stranded

"Gimmie your treasure!"

he demanded

He was known as Blackbeard!

the fierce!, the great!

scoundrels,thiefs, and cheaters

were all his mates.

he tied fuses to his beard

and set them aflame

telling his prey

this is no game.

the mayor of Ocracoke

got his best fleet

all in total,

a thousand feet.

he battled Blackbeard

for 3 long days

until Blackbeard's mind

began to haze

at last,

in the final duel

Blackbeard's life

was at the end of its spool

right before

he met his death

he spoke these words

with his final breath

" I curse ye all

far and wide!

for I'll return,

upon high tide!"

I leave you with these words

the're right and true

next time your out at sea

Blackbeard's coming after you!

That was really good! I could practically hear someone talking like a pirate, reading that to me.

in the final duel



Blackbeard's life



was at the end of its spool

That was the only bit I had a problem with. That rhyme sounded a little too forced to me. I might just be imagining it, I've been known to do that.

I also noticed that in the third to last line, you had a little typ-o and a common error, it says "the're" and i'm assuming YOU meant "they're". But it really should say "their". I know that sounded a little jumbled, so let's just say that "the're" should become "their"

Great job, overall!

IMPORTANT!!!-- The rules say you have to make 2 reviews before you post your own work, and I'm sorry to say that it's standard that if you break that rule, you need to make 4 reviews. It won't take that long, so hurry up and do it before some one else finds out XP

This was a wonderfully written piece.
Nice work!
there were a few spelling issues that LilSarahBreezy pointed out, but all in all, this was a very enjoyable poem.

KEEP WRITING!!




-me

Yay Mark!!!! Good job. that was pretty cool. Write more!

How much research did that take to write that poem? WOW! That poem was so awesome that I'm almost suspecting that you stole it from a book. I'm definitely not going to say that you have potential because that's what EVERYBODY says. I'm going to say that you got skills!

The only problem is that you spelled "you're" as "your" near the end of the poem. Also, you said "the're" instead of "they're"

Keep on writing!

This was a very fun, very entertaining poem! I love it! Very nicely done, perhaps it could use a little bit of touch ups here and there, but it seems a bit more authentic perhaps with its faults. I could really see this being a pirate story or song. Very nicely done.

Sometimes poems that bluntly tell a story irk me, but this one interested me and kept me reading through. I dont enjoy pirates and seafaring adventures, but this I liked. Spelling errors are present, but with a simple touch itsgreat.

I really, really liked this. It's simplicity is also it's strength.

was at the end of its spool

'Spool' seems to be like a desperate word to find something that rhymes with 'duel.'
That was the only bad thing I have to say. It was excellent! Keep up the good work!