I Can

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I can’t sing, or draw or write very well. All I know is that I have another ability that most people just ignore. The power to imagine and create my own life threatening problems.

I can make a tear roll down my cheek when I see a friend die. I can feel the adrenaline rush through my veins as I fly over the dessert with no one to save me. I can feel pleasure, kissing the prettiest boy in the whole wide world.

Okay, so I can’t really do all that. But I can. I just can in my head. During school time I would sit out in the sun and make the whole world dark. I would meet my true friends and enemies and I would know how to fight. I would have wings and fly out of the school, city, my own body, and still be here.

I can make myself the hero, saving my man from the ultimate form of evil. Or I can be the villain, torturing those who oppose my thoughts and ideas. I can make myself look pretty and have all the guys chase after me. I can make the best Whopper you’ve ever tasted.

I can do a lot of things and sometimes I feel awful about it. When I make one of my friends die I do tend to cry, but for some reason there is some for of pleasure from it. When I see them go down and not move anymore, I feel powerful. No, I don’t really kill my friends, just the ones in my head. And I remember how they die and rewind it in my head.

In my mind, it’s like I am the Goddess of my own world. The mental one anyways. Where I can sing, draw, and write.

-Poppy Mare
I want to do many, many things with my life, but I'm way too scared to really say. Writing, I guess is a way of being able to so all the things I want and not worry about being hurt.




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I <3 it.

I feel the same way. It also goes along with reading-shutting everything out and being absorbed by the words.

Very good descriptions!
Your bitterness shines through your attempt at wit. Go ahead and say something else profound.




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It was so brilliant I just dont what to say. :'D
Every rose has it's thorn..
Just like every night has it's dawn.


I've matured a lot and I realised it was time to come back.. for good!




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Interesting. I've never seen anything like this before. I can't say I understood it fully, but I liked it all the same. I found one mistake:

dessert


Should be desert, unless you're planning on flying over ice-cream, pudding, cake, jelly, etc.

I can make myself the hero, saving my man from the ultimate form of evil. Or I can be the villain, torturing those who oppose my thoughts and ideas.


This bit was really good. Very strong and very true.

There's not much else I can say apart from I liked this and I think you did a really good job.
*Don't expect to see me around much in the next couple of weeks. School has started again, and it'll be a couple of weeks before I've settled in. If you've asked me for a critique, you will get it, but not for a little while. Sorry*



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