Where Did It Go?

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Can’t write;
The words never come.

Can’t speak;
Nothing comes to mind.

Can’t think;
There’s nothing new.

Can’t create;
Inspiration is gone.

Where did it go?
Some people fall in love and touch the sky.
Some people fall in love and find Quicksand.

- Incubus




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Hmm. Well, it's very short and sweet..... But to the point?

I suppose a poem never really gets 'to the point', though....

Can’t write;
The words never come.
} Maybe switch the second lines in these two?
Can’t speak;
Nothing comes to mind.

Can’t think;
There’s nothing new.

Can’t create;
Inspiration is gone.

Where did it go?



Other than that... it was quite good.

~Lily~
"Friendship is like peeing on yourself: everyone can see it, but only you get the warm feeling that it brings."
~Anonymous

Nulla dies sine linea. --Not a day without a line




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I like it and it flows quite nice. I like the shortness and it is creative. However, the line

Inspiration is gone.


seems a bit too long syllable rise and I would shorten it by 1 or 2. Otherwise, it is great.




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Great poem, my thoughts exactly. I loved the last little bit:
Can’t create;

Inspiration is gone.


because sometimes there isn't any inspiration.
Writing: My Anti-Drug



Spend your days thinking about things that are good and true and beautiful and noble, and you will become good and true and beautiful and noble.
— Matthew Kelly