Poisoned Roses--Chapter 4

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Okay. i lied. I found time beecause there is nothing on tv.

Ash, seriously, you get better and better as you revise this.

I love how you descrbie the bonding process with Philip and Sophia.

I still feel sorry for sophia. I truly hope that she will find happiness in the future with Issac or find some way to be happy.

i know Nora is her friend, but there is something about her that ticks me off. like she is only pretend to be friend or something, which i know that's not true.

anyways. Great Job.
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Night Mistress:

Thanks! :D

I'm glad this is slowly improving. It is what I wanted to happen.

Thanks again!
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Hey Ash,

This was such a sad chapter and it kinda reminded me of the time I was watching Becoming Jane and Jane left Tom so that he could provide for his family, such a sad ending that was and this just made me feel even sadder because now Carmen is with Nora unless....well I'm not guessing I'll just have to go on to the next chapter.

Now for the insane compliments:

Your descriptions and the characters words and actions just keep getting better and better. I like how you created a whole new world of vampires that is totally different than Twilight though this is equally fantastic.
Here is one of my favorite quotes. It just made me love Philip more.
Us vampires, we don’t love like humans do. Humans look at it like a relationship, like a partnership. Their love grows slowly, starting out as a tiny brook but slowly building into a chaotic river. Now us, our love is the opposite. We start out like the chaotic river but slowly even out to a calming ocean. Our Bonding is a connection of two individuals who are compatibly matched to last for all eternity.

This was so beautiful! And Philip will always be my favorite character. Thanks for making him.

On to the next chapter.
~Angel
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Angel of Death:

Thanks! :D

Yeah, I loved writing that part. It was so fun to be kind of poetic like that. Philip is a very cool character :cool: hehe

Thanks again, Angel, for reading!
"Woe to the man whose heart has not learned while young to hope, to love—and to put his trust in life."
~ Joseph Conrad


"Music washes away from the soul the dust of everyday life."
~ Red Auerbach



I know history. There are many names in history, but none of them are ours.
— Richard Siken