Time is running out -

tick tock.
Time is running out
I’m the White Rabbit immersed in academia
haunted by competition
jaded
must go on.

tick tock –
Time is flying by, so fast, so fast -
is it really worth it?
night after night after day after night
– thwock scribble scribble scribble siiiiigh scribble scribble whiiiir –
help

tick tock.
deadlines approach
behind that epic heap
– back and forth back and forth –
schizophrenic Bliss.
Time is running out, Time is running out –

tick tock –
faster, faster you must go, and better you must be –
stress pumps through my veins
hefty anvil
stemming the flow
– can’t breathe can’t breathe –
what for?
for Nothing

tick tock.
mustn’t stop
come so far, i mustn’t stop
so…
I blunder
hands outstretched
curiously

tick tock.
pull yourself together, you crazy fool –
Sanity
bends over
eyes bloodshot
brain charred
– creeeeeeak –
must go on.

this meaningless existence,
this mad dash toward success,
this imminent disaster
off
until
Eternity.

– tick tock must go on –

I can really relate to this poem! I'm headed off to college and my future, and that's exactly what I'm reminded of when I read this. I love the use of onomatopoeia in the poem, since I don't always see it used very often. Also, I liked the clever reference to Alice In Wonderland, and I think it added to the time running out effect. Great job with this piece!

I agree with Rykun7, and I can also relate with same situation. People are going off to college and it's a scary thing for some. These years determine what we do for the rest of our lives. I believe that this poem can be different for anyone. It makes me think about my family and how I just want to stay with them, but it's a love/hate relationship. I am ready to leave, and go on to new things, but at the same time I worry to how they will turn out. I want to spend as much time with them as I can. Also the onomatopoeia you used worked very well with the poem. I felt like the tick tock was very repetitive, but a clock is indeed very repetitive. Over all, I liked it. Good Job.

Haha...I loved it. I absolutely adored this poem. It reminded me soooooooooooooooo much of myself. You see I'm a classic teenage kid that procrastinates faaaaaaaaar too much and shoves everything off till the last minute. So, I can totally imagine myself recalling this poem, while writing an AP History essay five in the morning lol. Your poem brings to mind this definition I came across on urbandictionary.com: junioritis -

A condition especially pertaining to juniors with rigorous academic schedules and strong ambitions for college that inhibits them from willingly doing their work and poses them ask the age-old question, "What is the point of all of this?"

I kind of found that very related to your poem. However, I may be wrong and if I am please do explain the meaning you intended. It was amazing. Good job and keep on writing!!!=)

I am DEFINITELY a tragic victim of junioritis.
Lord help me.
Thank god junior year is OVER.

Ooh, neato. Loving the Alice reference.

mercipourlevenin wrote:– thwock scribble scribble scribble siiiiigh scribble scribble whiiiir –
help

I'm not a big fan of the onomatopoeia - or, actually, the multiple vowels that are strewn in there. What's the "whiiir" for?

I do, however, like the isolated "help," as that's probably my favorite part of the poem. It's so desperate, just floating there without any punctuation.

hands outstretched
curiously

I wish it were curiouser.

tick tock.
pull yourself together, you crazy fool –
Sanity
bends over
eyes bloodshot
brain charred
– creeeeeeak –
must go on.

I think this is the weakest stanza, because it breaks form with the direct address to "you." I think of "pull yourself together" as a colloquialism - try making up your own phrase, I bet it would be a lot more vivid. "Crazy fool" could also be something more specific. The more specific you are with your words, the more universal your poetry will be.

While I liked the idea and the execution, I feel like a lot of this relied on stylings and composition while there wasn't a lot of attention to the rhythm of the poetry and the sound that the syllables make together. Even if it's not meant to be spoken aloud, try reading it that way, just to get a feel for how the words fit (or don't fit) together.

As the above reviews have said, the subject matter is definitely something pertinent to all of us! In that respect, everyone here can probably relate. Thanks for sharing it - sometimes we all need to just kick back and stop worrying about everything.

The use of onomatopoeia in this piece was nice. It helped bring out the drama and made it interesting to read. As the other posters have said, your Alice in Wonderland reference was very clever. I also think this is a poem that can be interpreted in many different ways, but in a sense I feel a lot of readers would be able to relate to this.

Very well done. =D