I Know

I know

I know the Moon Lady

The flapping wings of a dragonfly
The rough humming engine of a boat
Laughter of mocking strangers
Giggling of one and two

I know the woman who lives by the stars

Soft silk of a tiger
Sparkling light in the sky
Rushing red water before the attack of the snake

I know the Lady of the Moon

I smell the scent of fresh moon cake
And deep crimson turtle blood

I know the woman who lost her husband


Amah says, “ A girl can never ask only listen.”
My mother advises me, “ A boy can run and chase dragonflies , because it is his nature. But a girl should stand still. If you are still for a very long time, a dragon fly will no longer see you. Then it will come to you and hide in the comfort of your shadow.”

I know the ruler of the moon.

I think that the beginning two lines should be merged. The 'I know" is a little to repetitive. I know that honors English poems can be a little daft though because nobody wants their emotion splayed out for a teacher to criticize. But I wouldn't consider it a poem that many people will want to read. No offense it was a homework assignment, not a real poem.You could have made it into one, but you didn't it wasn't a subject you could do much with anyways. And let off on the enter key please, to many spaces.

No it is not a poem. But my teacher liked it very much he gave me five extra points, I just wanted to a real opinion. Thank you.


p.s.- The assigment was called a " I know" poem, hence the reason I over used it ahaha. JackBauerHasBaldSpot did a better job then me Im sure...

I think this is something you should work on developing this more. Even though it was and assignment, it has the potential to become a real and engaging poem. Develop your character more and give the reader some feeling to work with.