Good creative concept here. Good facial expression drawn on the face of the goldfish's.
Better yet, a good tattoo idea. I'm sure there's more than just a few people that would love to have this picture on the back of their leg. You should do a copy of this picture with your colour concept added to it. You see a lot of fish as tattoos but most have colour.
Now that I've seen the original, I think I know why the hand on yours looks like it's palm-down (the blobbiness around it in the original is confusing). I would try looking at your own hand rather than the ones in the picture if you decide to edit it and make it a bit thinner or something (but it's always really hard to erase dark pencil like that).
The fish in the bottom right is my favorite, he's so cute! I think the upper right one only looks funny because he's not really foreshortened enough - you can't really tell that his tail is behind him, it sort of looks like it's next to him.
I agree that it would be cute with color added... I'm kind of wondering what this would look like if you inked over it in something waterproof (maybe using a lightbox) and then used watercolors.
They're so cute, Via! I hope you post more of your drawings.
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