May I Have This Dance

Fantastic piece of poetry. I loved your use of poetic elements and the reptetion. There is really nothing that the others haven't covered. All in all, I just loved it.

Grade: A+++++++++++++

This was very good. It conveys how love can be in some people in a different way than you would normally find. I thought that it was very well written.

The only thing that got a bit annoying was the repetition. A couple times is okay, but every stanza? It was just a bit much. Other than that though, I loved it.

Hi,
That was great. I really like how you went through the seasons and then the part about the space. My favorite stanza would have to be the second.
Again that was really good.
Keep up the great work.

Cait

Oh wow. Really. So beautiful. I'm not bothered with the repetition, in fact I like to do it myself, too. But I must say I had to laugh at Vernon's sledgehammer.

There were still a few clichés, like the velvet sky and the flying thing in the end, but nothing else to criticize. Or actually, I think it should do well with the first four stanzas. When the year is over. It breaks the poem just a little bit to start about comets and stars.

But great job, really.

Wish you luck
Dmeter

Wow - that was beautiful! I have nothing negative to say about it. Your metaphors are great, the words flow perfectly...

You've already got the critiques and all, but I am adding another A++++++++ to your work.

Very poetic, indeed and love the imagery. Romance is bubbling in your words and there's a classy feel about this.

It's beautiful, and i love the meaning. Repition is good, but i think there is too much Repition in your poem. You can try using "May I have this dance?" at the beginning of the fist, fifth and seventh stanzas. It sounds much better when you read it. Other than that, your peom is perfect. I love the whole earth and space imagery that you used throughout the peom.

Hey, loved your poem! You don't need to change a thing! If you ever entered a contest for poetry, you should use this one. I found absolutely nothing wrong with it. Keep up the good work!