My Heart's Shackles

You look at me in the eyes and pretend to love me.
Deception, to you it is a key.
I’m oblivious to your deed,
Because you are what I thought I might need.

Then you begin to turn,
The metal shackles that burn.
I start to cry,
And you stupidly ask why.

I can’t believe I thought you were the one.
Now that you’ve deceived me I’m done.
Once I walk away from you,
The burning goes away. That’s all I had to do.

You rhymed very well, I can't think of anything "bad" about this poem, I really liked it!

I understand the poem. I mean to say that your message is quite clear. It's a topic that is often written about... which MEANS then, that you need to shed some new light on the topic. Give us some imagery, give us some depth to the relationship; I think a little development will take you a long way.

That said, I'd say it's an OK poem, but there is limitless opportunity to improve (which is exciting, if you ask me!!)
Anyway, all the best,
s