I liked the idea, using cliches on purpose is great, otherwise not.
and think of you. (who's that?) --> this line made me wonder whether you'd meant "thinking" insted of think. And the "(who's that)" is cool, but I think you should delete the point after "you". It looks better that way, I think.
Overall, sweet and simple. I liked this. And yeah, making fun of cliches is something I appreciate and like to do, too. So good job.
Best wishes
Demeter
"Your jokes are scarier than your earrings." -Twit
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I must say, I found that very entertaining. The way you managed to poor in so much cliché stuff, and still keep me interesting was great. The last stanza was great, and the third was brilliant. I think all the writers on here who do cliché rip-offs will think twice next time, well done I usually prefer… original pieces but since this is so clearly ironic for being original for being cliché I love it! (did that make any sense?)
Haha. Thankyou! More compliments! I appreciate that people have finally caught onto the fact that it is not sweet and full of emotion. Its irony and made to poke fun. Thankyou!
I'd say a nice play of words...Dramatic is all over this...Well that was stupid...Otherwise why would it be in here?...All mistakes I caught and suggestions have been made by others...
I liked this a lot and for some reason it reminds me of Carol Ann Duffy, she has the some sort of ironic style.
Irony in poetry is sometimes quite hard to get across right, but you did a good job.
Well done, have a star
To find freedom in the most unlikeliest of places: at the bottom of an inkwell, on the tip of a quill.
