I just read the previous chapters and they're amazingly good. It's presented very well and i can feel your mc's emotions. I'm happy her mother talked to her and said she loved her.
Just work on your punctuation and it will be great!
~Dommy:D
This is our decision, to live fast and die young.
We've got the vision, now let's have some fun.
Yeah, it's overwhelming, but what else can we do,
Get jobs in offices, and wake up for the morning commute?
Yep, grandmas are in! I think you're story moves from place to place soo quickly, it's hard to stay with the story.
I love istories that are more descriptive, but this ones good!