When you feel.

It’s like fading into a larger picture
Wherein you lose all delicate features
And wonder where the light has gone.
You find it, hiding, in the pockets of space
That are left in your absence.

haha. Why has no one critted this? XD

It’s like fading into a larger picture
Wherein you lose all delicate features
And wonder where the light has gone.
[And] You find it, hiding, in the pockets of space
That are left in your absence.

I like it, but it's terribly short. But then, most poems are short... yeah. I don't see anything majorly wrong with it, but I think that an and should go there. But I'm no expert, so you don't have to listen to me.

I like to message behind it. It's a good read. Sorry I can't be much help.

-Jared

I have to agree with BBB, there isn't much i can say about this poem. But its a nice, simple and thought provoking poem. I liked it.

I completely know where you're coming from and I don't usually get that with poetry. That's why I don't read it. But I understand this and I agree with it.

But I don't think TriB's inclusion of "and" in the fourth line is a good choice. Leave it how it is.

Thank you so much, you three, you guys rock my socks. ^^

I'm really glad you liked it.

*Hearts* Le Penguin.

It's short and simple. It's nice.

I liked the poem. Nice imagery. Keep it up girl!

Yay! Short poems! I love short poems. This was nice. I liked the idea, and the image you conveyed, however small it is. Cute! I have no complaints! Nice job Pingu. ^_^

~Yoyo