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Rasi
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Mon Mar 17, 2008 8:01 pm
Rasi says... · Mon Mar 17, 2008 8:01 pm
Two, two that yell
Two that fight.
Two that turn to
you and ask, "Who
is right?"
How do you
Decide between
The two
You call your
Friends?

How can you
Choose between,
Your best friend
And one you feel
Led to help?

Who is right?
Who is wrong?
There are two
Between these
You must choose
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Sometimesinbetween
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Mon Mar 17, 2008 8:15 pm
Sometimesinbetween says... · Mon Mar 17, 2008 8:15 pm
Hey this was good! I liked it. I just caught a couple things I thought might be typos. :D

How do you
Decide between
The two
You call you
Friends?

'You call you' Is the second 'you' supposed to be 'your'?
How can you
Choose between,
You best friend
And one you feel
Led to help?

Same, is 'you' supposed to be 'your?
Great job!
-Sometimes-
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