Wind Whisper

Shh,here the wind whisper
Its so soft and gentle,
the trees waving so slowly and swiftly.

Walking through the leaves and twigs
Crick crack the twigs snap
in the silence.

Quietly move through the forest
But dont make a noise,
You want to hear the wind whisper
Because thats the most beautiful the forest.

By Mhairi Wilson (hope you like it but its nothing special)

Hmm...it's ok I guess but I think it's not very original and it's a little cliche.

Its

You need an apostrophe between the "t" and "s"

Because thats the most beautifulof the forset

I didn't get this line. It should be

"Because it's the most beautiful thing in the forest"

Plus you need a space between beautiful and of and you spelt forest wrong

Sorry if I was too harsh but I figured it might help you in future work!

~Lollipop~

Yeah its good, though mind the spelling mistakes

I agree, kind of a cliche.

here the wind whisper

this should be "hear" if you want the verb, or "whispers" if you want to say that the wind whispers somewhere. Just put an apostrophe (that's what it's called, lol) between the "don't! on the second to last line and you're done.

sorry if i was harsh on ya- xx

One other thing this doesn't make sense

the trees waving so slowly and swiftly

How can something be moving slowly and swiftly at the same time. Fast and slow? Hmm...

~Lollipop~

not sre whether i liked this or not....i'm not sure about the 'crick crack the twigs sanp' it might just be me but it didn't sound right.