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hey
quick question
did work mail my last check?
let me know

.mom says we got it

Sweet!
Critique
a poem for me?

When I have time

Sorry I can’t write
a lotOne of these days
I’ll tell you about my crazy,
crappy life.

poem was good
others might misunderstandThey
don’t have
your history

like WHO?

when you get home
let’s
see a movie

you have to
make sure
i get to see
becoming jane
Daniel deronda
blood diamond

not for general viewing
you’ll be here in
a week

No worries about font; personally, I only find it annoying if someone's used it when they don't have any format to preserve, but that is not the case here ^_^

crappy life.

poem was good
others might misunderstandThey
don’t have
your history

Did some of the words get pushed together? or was this intentional?

Overall, I don't get it. I mean, yes, I see the conversation between two (presumably) sisters, but where has it progressed to and from by the end? What is the point of writing it?

The pushed together words were intentional... I have to admit, I didn't really know where I was going with this myself. I suppose I'd better work on that...

Yes it doesn't make sense but its giving the reader an idea. It may not be logical....but it makes sense. Lol. Hard explain what I'm trying to say here.

Like I get the taste of a conversation, of sisterhood. I can see the friendship between the two. I really like these kind of poems. They're not logical but they make sense.

It WOULD be nice if you could work this poem out and maybe add a little here and there to make it more easier to understand.

Happy writing
-icy.

I think this is interesting. In a good way. It seems like something that would be in part of a bigger story. You know, one of the ones that are made up of different poems telling a story? Like the book 'Locomotion'. I dont mind the font and such, and -like icy said- I can tell the bond between the two siblings. Usually the short, simple sentences would bug me, but somehow in this poem, it made me want to read it over and over and over again. It was very good, please continue to write poetry so I can read it.