A First Attempt

JabberHut · 2008-03-04T23:24:25Z

*shyly looks around the poetry section* It's like moving to a new country, I swear... Ay-nee-way, I've been challenged to try this very frightening (I think) part of literature known as Poetry . You may or may not have heard of it.. Go easy on me. :wink: A First Attempt Here I sit with pen in hand To write a poem oh-so grand. I sing and snooze, I mull and muse, Yet, alone, no thought can stand. I once thought poetry was fun, Or so said my father’s son. The blank paper I see Keeps glaring at me— I’ll never get this poem done. For insight, I observe my room— Dolls, books, a flower in bloom. No thought comes to mind— My insight must be blind— For I’m left with no poem, but gloom. I moan and groan and pull my hair, For my brother lied—oh, how’d he dare! No poem I’d write, No matter the night; I’ll never write again, I swear. I dotted my i’s and crossed my t’s. Don’t ask me to write another, please. My rhythm’s off And so I scoff— Poetry I’d write forever, I tease. I throw my pen atop the table To read this poem (if I was able). I cringe, I cry, Yet deep inside, My talent was there, a bit unstable. I share my work with friends galore For all their comments, I implore. They read and were pleased With this opportunity I seized; I was anxious to write some more. So here I sit with pen in hand To write a poem even more grand. I sing and snooze, I mull and muse Until a poem, alone, could stand.

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Mon Apr 07, 2008 9:44 pm

RandomGrrl says... · Mon Apr 07, 2008 9:44 pm

Cute cute cute, Jabber! Nice and light, not like some poetry (I'm such a hypocrite, just posted like the saddest poem I've written... well, sad for me...). I really enjoyed it, and it leaves me with a strong sense of satisfaction. Nice work!

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Tue Jul 20, 2010 1:54 pm

EdgarAllanPoe says... · Tue Jul 20, 2010 1:54 pm

Hey, Jabber! Nice poem! It felt like I was reading Robert Frost! I liked how you were writing a poem about how you didn't know what to write about. You have TALENT! *sings Broadway*

Feelings restrained;
Devils remain;
Paranoia is part of the blame.

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Tue Jan 25, 2011 6:51 am

earendil says... · Tue Jan 25, 2011 6:51 am

I won't even bother denying the fact that you got me to smile from beginning to end, and I even laughed in some parts.

This is so awesome. I remember when I first started writing poetry, this is exactly how I felt too. The only difference is that you're skilled enough to actually write it all down. Great poem, definitely enjoyed this.

Keep it up!

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Sat Dec 03, 2011 5:00 pm

Deanie says... · Sat Dec 03, 2011 5:00 pm

JABBERRRRRRRR!

Well hi! I'm not sure you'll ever get this comment because its the last of many. I know you wrote this poem years ago... but thats just what I do. I dig up ancient pieces of work and comment... just because I can!

I especially liked this poem. For a first posted poem its really great! The rhyming scheme worked and everything was very well laid out. It was a fun read... and is better than any poem I've ever written. It's a great talent to be able to use rhyming so well... it just doesn't seem to work for me.

I extremely enjoyed this!

Deanie x

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Mon Dec 05, 2011 5:52 pm

xXanimeislifeXx says... · Mon Dec 05, 2011 5:52 pm

Awwww! This was utterly adorable! My first poem read by you and I'm already hooked. Great job!

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