Timeless

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Hi just tell me what you think please!

Timeless

As I stumble along a midnight path
The world around me opens long forgotten eyes
As I see and hear with longing heart
Nature opens doors, and beckons light.

An owl jumps through a ring of fire
As squirrels take flight before my eyes
Birds serenade me as I amply walk
And nature reveals a happier life.

The dance of night has come at last
To teach me things of past and yore-
When Kings still walked among these trees,
Oh, what is life? If not to see?

The trees sing their simple songs
Of timeless beings who walked upon
The Moonlight Path I tread along
While listening to their history song.

And if you close your eyes you’ll hear
The simple message they call to bear
To hold your heart they will sing
A song that will save you and me.
"You start thinking anything is possible if you have enough nerve"- J.K Rowling




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very nice work i like it very much.....keep up the good work^_^




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All you need to do is add some commas here and there and you will be fine. I really like your poem you have here it is very good. Keep up the good work ok.

PM me if you need me.

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This has just a great feeling to it. I felt like I had stepped into a myth or fairy tale. The rhythm was wonderful. It just flowed so well.

Nice, nice job. I really couldn't find anything to critique or comment on. I can just tell you that I really liked it.

*applause*

Great job.

~GryphonFledgling
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Very beautiful poem.
Keep writing.
The only wrong love is only one never felt.
Live to day as if your would die tomorrow.
Love like you know no other, dream as if they'd come true, hope because you can reach the stars.



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