Desperate for your love

*Forgive me my dear friends, if this a bit extreme....im just showing my feelings to the lord! can i get an amen?*


I am desperate.
Desperate for your love.
My head is hung,
Hands held high.
Tears stream down
Leaving trails of sorrow
To slide down my face.
My heart leaps with joy
At this miracle you've given.
You've brought me home,
Safe from the terror of the world.
You've used your gentle, guiding hand
That was so harshly bruised,
To lead me where I must stand.
I cannot deny it now.
The love that you bring,
Swells my heart with joy.
And I realize.
I am desperate.
Desperate for your love.

AMEN!!!!!

I love this poem girl!

It gives people visualization of the love Christ has for us.

THANK YOU! if only everybody new him......*sighs* hey have you heard about the project they are doing in china? abotu building churches?

I am a church goer my self i really like this. If you go to church do you read it there?
If not you should it would give others inspiration to write happy and joyful things not like me which is total opposite. I love the lord he is great. Ominpotent i say which means all powerful high authority.

i really like this keep up the awesome work!

SimonCowellLuver

I knew you religous when I saw the Casting Crowns avatar. There is a book series called Sierra Jensen. It's about a Christan teen going though life as a God-fearing person. It has Christ's veiw on teen problems its awesome !

I've read one of the other related series, ahhhhh! what is it called!

but its really good

Amen!

Go Jesus, you know it!

I liked this poem. It was really simple, but it was loving and really expressed your want and thanks to God.

Really have nothing else to say have I...

*hallelujah*

~GryphonFledgling

I am not Christian, or even religious, but I can appreciate religious/spiritual poetry and prose. What I cannot forgive is apologizing for your faith, as you did in the summary beneath the title.

The poem itself is, if a little cliche, not objectionable.

I've read one of the other related series, ahhhhh! what is it called!

but its really good

There is the Christy Miller series.

I only had one problem with your story, if it is a poem I think that it should at least have verses, like after every four lines or so, you start another four but you leave a space between each. Understand?
shanan-cat! Rock on!

This was wonderful, loved it. A few things though.

First, when you say 'I am desperate for your love' in the first two lines it makes it sounds as though you don't have their love, even though you want it. Once I read on, I understood it, but you might want to change the way you phrase that. Having your readers confused within the first lines is never good.

*singerofthenight* wrote:Tears stream down
Leaving trails of sorrow
To slide down my face.

The first and third lines right here struck me as a little redundant.

In the last two lines, I wouldn't repeat 'desperate' again in the last line. I'd just say 'I am desperate for your love.' It was good in the very beginning (except for what I said above), but I'd change it in the last two lines.

Also, I agree with shanan-cat, you should make verses.
But apart from that, loved it.

Always, keep writing.


*adna*

yeah sorry about that. i just was trying to find...i dont know... a catch phrase?

I hate Religion and 'God' so much. I do not believe that 'God' exists and I just needed to let you know that.

Absolutly brilliant poem! Wonderfully written, very clear in some weird way. Very enjoyable. A good piece of work.