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Scott,

Mr. Popular, thats who you are
Adored and Admired by people wide and far
with a charm thats addictive and looks that can kill
your face should be the one that's on the dollar bill
Scott, we all know this (And you know this too)
That God had a great day when he created you
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Hey

I really really like this. Its cute and funny, and sweet. Did you actually write this as a valentine to someone?

Really creative, and nice to read
Good Job
T




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Yeah. I wrote 22 Original Poems for people as Valentine Cards ;)
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Ha, this is cute.

I liked your rhyming scheme and it had a nice playful flow to it. I could imagine this being in a Valentine's Day card though, because it is a little cliched. Still, very good though. I like doing poems about friends; it's fun. ^^

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Short, sweet and to the point, this poem would make a great card,

I like the way you made it have a sort of... i dont know, innocence to it that make it funny, and cute instead of lame.
Don't take life too seriously, no one gets out alive




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Scott,



Mr. Popular, thats who you are

Adored and Admired by people wide and far

with a charm thats addictive and looks that can kill

your face should be the one that's on the dollar bill

Scott, we all know this (And you know this too)

That God had a great day when he created you


Haha. I ruddy loved this! The meter is good, and although it will probably never be show stopping or deeply phliosophical, it's always great fun to play around with poetry now and then, especially for holidays and such. If we didn't it would be all frowns and serious, emotionional poetry, right? There's a few things here- punctuation is lacking, and there's capitaliszation here and there when it's not needed, but hey, if your editing that's nothing big.

Oh, and I've just realised this was posted a few months ago- fitting for the date.

I hope Scott loved it!


Hope and Best wishes,

Eimear
We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars.

Oscar Wilde.




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Oh this is so cute!
Could you post some of the other original poems that you wrote?
I'd stick a few commas in there; like after
"with a charm thats addictive"

But no biggie!
I hate putting punctuation in my poems...it drives my reviewers insane!
So yeah, I know where you're coming from.
Anyway, nice poem!
"...she was a lovely lady, with a romantic mind and such a sweet mocking mouth..."

- 'Peter Pan' by J.M. Barrie



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