Young Writers Society

I may not be a princess
With hair as great as gold

I may not be a rich antique
Which that of can be sold

I may not have
All the richess untold

But if you love me for me
My love for you shall be the greatest in the world.

i like it

i like it

i like it

Hi. This was an okay poem. My advise to you would be to make it longer. You did describe a lot of normal girls and wanting to be loved in the poem, but your big mistake was not making it long enough.
Maybe you should come up with some more ideas to write this!
Bye,
Kelsi =)

thanks for posting, and i came up with it in 2min so i didn't expect it to be good but thanks for the critisism.

Hi,
I thought this poem was really cute and sweet. It seemed a bit short to me though.

I think that you could make it longer, just have that be one stanza.

There is not much else that I can suggest to you, considering that the poem was that short.

I don't think the title really fitted, even though that is not my area to say if it did or not. Love just seems a lot stronger then:

I may not be a princess
With hair as great as gold

I may not be a rich antique
Which that of can be sold

I may not have
All the richess untold

But if you love me for me
My love for you shall be the greatest in the world.

What you have written here.

I do like your poem and I urge you to write more so that it's longer and it won't be like reading something in 5ht grade

You only came up with it in two minutes? Well it's wonderful then. Don't you just love when you get a cute little idea like that in your head. Add some more to it though, you'll get better reviews.

-lg*

Hey

i like this poem alot, but i agree with everyone else. This would be much better if it was longer and had more mood. If you can explain love more then in the title it would be better so add on to it, but other that that it was really good.