Just Don't

Don’t trust

You’ll only end up getting hurt

Don’t love

You’ll regret it

Don’t regret

They won’t

Don’t care

They don’t

Never forgive

They don’t want your sorry

Don’t cry

What does that accomplish?

Don’t believe

You’ll just be let down

Don’t dream

People will only crush them

Don’t get close

They’ll push you away

Don’t let them in

They won’t understand

Don’t feel

Why feel when it hurts so much?

Don’t look back

Just leave it all behind

Don’t stay

Follow their example and just walk away

Don’t change for them

They’ll still see you the same

Don’t feel for them

You’ll be the one who ends up with all the pain

Don’t look out for them

They won’t for you

…

Are people kind or cruel?

Neither

People are

SELFISH


They don’t need you

This doesn't seem like poetry; more like a survey, almost. It's very list-like; I can see where it's going from the first line. The greatest thing about poetry is that you can say what you want while saying something completely different. Nothing of that nature happens here.

Keep the same idea, that people are selfish, but think more in images and actual words rather than punchlines and morals and it, like all ideas, can be beautiful. If you'd like some recommendations for poetry to read and learn from, I'm sure we could ask around and find something lovely.

Good luck!
-Amelia

thats really simple

lulu

Its really kinda no offense, you said it yourself, emo. i don't mind it being emo. It is a strange form of poetry but its good

Er... I don't know about this. It doesn't seem to poetic to me, and it left no impact. It's like one of those "Do's and Don'ts of Life" kind of things, which isn't exactly considered "poetry". You're telling your readers what they shouldn't do, and it bores us because it sounds like you're a parent telling a child not to cross a street without looking or a teacher instructing students not to do drugs.

It's seems kind of listy, as Amelia said, and I didn't pick up on your emotions. Keep trying.

Best wishes with your work!

~*Syd*~