I've just started dis story so here's the blurb: "It all started twenty five years ago. Many people who have visited this town are never seen again. A small amount of them are found. These people were found either dead or shredded to bits. Some people had entered this town finding these bodies but most of them couldn’t even arrive home safely to inform someone what they had seen. Now more people are going to stumble into this town. Not even knowing what is waiting for them… what is going to happen. There is one question that needs to be answered: who will live to tell the tale?"
How can they be dead or shredded to bits? If you're in tiny pieces, I'd think you'd be dead already. Aside from that it seems pretty interesting. Have you started writing any of it yet?
haha yeh true well i'll change that to: "they are found dead and shredded to bits"... yeh i've started a small amount of it since i just started it and as you can tell it's gonna be a horror and might even be a R rating! thanks for the comment
I don't know. It seems a bit "Read the plot without slugging through 200+ pages" to me. Might just be my own opinion. I think that these people who wander in to the town and might not survive should be the main topic of the blurb, if it's about them.
My example (without knowing anything about the story, sorry if I am disgustingly wrong):
Three teenagers take an innocent road trip. Bob, Fred and Max have just graduated from High School and have been planning a trip across the country for months in celebration. But when they reach an abandoned town (name here), things start to go wrong. There's a killer on the loose, and he's after them. This intense horror (?) will arouse the inevitable question; who will survive?"
Hmm, pretty good for someone who was busy watching Futurama and senselessly typing.
My point is, don't write the history of the town, because it sounds like "Ok, this person has written a history book that has been accidently placed in "Horror Fiction", better alert the librarian." Mention it in your book, but not on the blurb.
yeh i know what you mean... thanks for telling me you've been alot of help and by da way the story has a kind off secret to it so you gotta try and guess with your own imagination to what you think the explanation of the horrror in the story
Yes, I definitely agree with Mantis. You don't want to give away the best part of the story on the back of the cover.
You should have the people who show up start finding little bits of people or corpses all over the place, not tell the reader on the back of the book.
Leave it hanging and ominous, allowing the mystery to build just from reading the back of the book.
As an afterthought, I seldom read the back of any of the books I buy/check out from the library. I like to meet the adventure as it comes without any idea of what's going to happen.
Anyway, I'm glad you're starting a novel. That's where it started for me. Don't be disappointed if you get bored with it and want to quit... that's happened to me many times.
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and by da way the story has a kind off secret to it so you gotta try and guess with your own imagination to what you think the explanation of the horrror in the story
