APPETITE

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Everyone wants to feel alive.

To have an interest that makes


Your blood race

Your heart flutter

Your muscles tingle




Most people are lucky.


Most people don’t have to hide their hobbies.


But some people do.










This is the story of a boy who had to hide his hobby.

This is simply the story of a boy who loved food.

He was not unhealthy, in fact, he never finished his meals.

For eating was not his hobby.



The food itself was.

The taste
The appearance
And the smell most of all




That is all I wish I could tell you about the Blood Baker.

But, simply because I am writing this final report on his case,

I have to start from the beginning.


At least, from the beginning the police have come to piece together.


The blood baker was born in England.
His father was a ranked official of the Police.
Most of his mother’s information is unknown or classified.
It is theorized that she died in childbirth.

His father did not care.
He had a son.
It is also theorized that his father was schizophrenic.

There are no records that have been found of the exact date or location of the Blood Baker’s birth in England, but we have been told his father named him Edwin.

Because of the time and place of Edwin’s existence, he was malnourished as an infant. His father was fired when he was born for reasons we have not yet uncovered.

Edwin’s father did not send him to school. Instead, he taught him himself, or…tried too. Edwin could not speak (Note-he showed no signs of intelligence in his earlier childhood) His father was a man of little patience, and gave up on his deprived son rather quickly.

Edwin’s father grew to hate him, or so it seemed, because Edwin spent his days locked in the outhouse. He only saw the light of day when his father tossed in molded bread, or bacteria soup that held a little water to keep him alive.

My journey to the outhouse we believe was Edwin’s was inconclusive.


Edwin’s father was arrested when he was six years old on charges of murder. It is rumored he killed a family of six in their sleep for reasons unknown. Edwin never found this to be the reason why his father did not come home. He has been recorded in sessions saying his father was eaten.

When Edwin was seven, he was found barely alive in his vermin infested home by a demolition crew whom had been scheduled to level the house.

The crew has been sworn to silence about what they saw inside the house. Most walls and all the furniture have been taken into our maximum security center for further evaluation. Experts report it was impossible for a child of that age to create such works of art.

Being almost completely void of human contact for all his life, Edwin reacted strangely to the men. When the foreman discovered him on the kitchen floor, Edwin crawled over and smelled his hand.

In later interviews, the foreman (Note- name recorded as Emery Hittom) Claims that Edwin actually licked his hand, and then smelled it.

The foreman drove Edwin to an orphanage in Worchester and told the caretaker all he knew. (Note-Name recorded as HEIDI MUNKEN)

SHE WOULD BE HIS FIRST V-----




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=D I'm afraid to know why it was stopped. I was quite interested. 0o Edwin didn't eat the writer, did he? D;=

=D I thought it was wonderful, I just got a bit confusied about what it was. Is it a narrative poem, or just a plain story? D;= Could you possibly make it a bit clearer?
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Awesome story until it stopped unexpectedly.

The one thing that tripped me up was when you (or the speaker, whateverz) said that the boy was shut up in the outhouse - and yet he was found inside the house in the kitchen?? I was like, FTW?

So yeah - besides that, I would definitely like to read the rest. ^^

Please continue this!

Cheers.

- jai -
I have an approximate knowledge of many things.




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That sent shivers down my spine. Nice work!

You've used an interesting structure to start it off. I love the way you've left most of this a mystery, leaving it up to the readers imagination.

I have to agree that stopping half way through the last word was a very bad idea. Maybe you could just leave it as 'she would be his first.'

I'm not really sure what else to say about this. Keep up the good work. Kudos.




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Whoa. Cool.

However it was kind of confusing. Sometimes I couldn't tell if the story was talking about Edwin's life or his son's. Use a clearer transition.

The idea that you're writing a report on this is cool. You might want it to look more report-y, though.
"Man cannot discover new oceans unless he has the courage to lose sight of the shore."

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Not many will ever really understand you / That doesn't mean you aren't worth understanding
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