Rainbow!

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The orange streetlamps highlight the rain
as another teenage gay cries in pain,
On the corner where the drunks lie.

They beat him up, they called him names,
he tries to escape this twisted game.
And his heart lies crushed
on the corner where the drunks lie.

Two weeks on- his body is found,
On the corner- on the ground.

The anbulance arrived to take him away,
And the sun came out for the first time today.

So a rainbow spread across the sky.
on the corner- where the drunks lie
his body was buried but his soul was high!
(in the sky)
Last edited by nothingface on Sat Dec 15, 2007 9:02 pm, edited 1 time in total.
The Best
And Most Beutiful Things,
Cannot Be Seen Or Even Touched.
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Hmmm. This was pretty good, and I like the first stanza.
But you really need to do some spell-check. And maybe add some stuff here and there. And in the last stanza...you should add a line.
"So a rainbow spread across the sky.
On the corner where the drunks lie
his body was buried but his soul was high."
That would kind of tie the whole thing together.
♥~*Emalee*~♥




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It was good. Keep up the good work!
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I really like this one!

But I don't quite understand why "his phone lies crushed"... his cell phone? He was trying to call for help? I'm not sure why it is his phone... Maybe I'm just dense. Anyway, I like the ending. The happy rainbow at the end was really nice. Good job! ^^



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