The only part that killed it for me was when they DIED! Whyd that have to happen? It was good, but i still wish they would have lived. I like your stories, and if they lived i would have had more to read! But no. Poop. Either way, it was an amazing story, as always. You better post a different story soon!
By the sweat of your brow you will eat your food until you return to the ground, since from it you were taken; for dust you are and to dust you will return. — Genesis 3:19