this is interesting and appealing to see.....but I have absolutley no clue what it's about.
And why is it upside down?
Just never ever forget to live ok? Never ever forget to be happy when things maybe aren't the greatest. Yeah, that's right- because every moment is making you who you will be and is really worth it in the end. So just....live.
That's awesome! It's a visual poem! It looks like an X, or a figure eight pattern, like pacing!
That said, why "drip drop" as the repeated phrase? I mean, if it's an animal pacing, or anyone, for that matter, you can use a whole slew of repeated sounds and motions -- crack, drip, slam, ping, etc.
I'm not entirely sure what your vision is with this piece -- I see the image, and I see the imagery as a caged animal pacing, but what else? Why the reflection of the poem? It's a cool technique to be sure, but what purpose does it serve? You easily could have done that by just writing it right-side-up and still upside down... er, does that make sense? Like this...
silence ... drip drop drip...
Drop.
Dead.
Dead.
Drop
...drip drop drop... silence.
Anyway! That's all form me.
Mesh
***Under the Responsibility of S.P.E.W.*** (Sadistic Perplexion of Everyone's Wits)
Medieval Lit! Come here to find out who Chaucer plagiarized and translated - and why and how it worked in the late 1300s.
Hi everyone! Thanx so much for the reviews! Now it is time to faithfully proceed with my duties and answer your questions.
Kyte and Swirl Antara: Well, it’s like MadHatter mentioned: as a puddle, it’s a reflection of the poem and, in turn, a repetition of its contents, so the happenings are never-ending because they will always be reflected/repeated. I also like how Meshugenah mentioned that the poem can also be visualized as an eight-figure for its design is that of an eternal path.
Okay… I have a really good analysis of my poem (God, yes, I know… pathetic) but I refrained from posting it because I really want to see what you guys can interpret from my poem.
MadHatter and Meshugenah: Thank you guys so much for your interpretations! ^_^ I love to analyze reader response. You are correct in thinking that the “animal” is caged, but aren’t humans animals as well? So the poem can twist from the image of a caged animal to that of a caged person, which would also add a psychological twist to the poem—think of the development of the individual’s actions… ok, I’ll stop now!
****P.S.: I’m sorry if I’m not answering your questions directly or completely, but although I do have my own interpretation(s), I’d love to hear others’ reactions, interpretations, and opinions to my poems. Constructive criticism is appreciated.
Oh! Mesh, I forgot to mention that I really liked the right-side-up-and-up-side-down technique! I am seriously considering experimenting with it for my next poem. Thanx!! ^_^
It's like everyone tells a story about themselves inside their own head. Always. All the time. That story makes you what you are. We build ourselves out of that story. — Patrick Rothfuss, The Name of the Wind
love ya all!! xoxox, toki 
