friday's cool

friday's cool
coz there's no more school
you get 2 stay up late and watch t.v.
no homework 4 math or p.e.
you get 2 hang with friends
and have a laugh
but at the end
and you go 2 bed
saturday's great
so have fun then
i hope u do
coz i will too!

Hee, weekends rule. This is a cute li'l poem.

you get 2 hang with friends
and have a laugh
but at the end
and you go 2 bed
saturday's great
so have fun then

I liked the sorta couplet rhyming sequence, but you lost it here. Try to stick to the same patternm and I'd use less abbreviations, and maybe a capital letter at the start of lines. The first glance can tell you wether you want to read it or not, so Tty to make it appear as good as possible.

Meh. Don't we all know it. This needs critical grammatical editing. It sounds like one of those samey r&b songs; make it poetic.