Haiku

1.
Canvas of colors,
splashed across an ocean,
sunlight becomes black.
2.
Enormas titans,
carring the sky above,
watching those below.
3.
Pillows of white,
fluffy castles above us,
floating in the wind.
4.
A silver platter
glowing in the darkened sky,
night light of the earth.
5.
mirror of clear blue,
reflecting sunlight to all,
giving life to man.

You write poetry too? I'm so jealous!
Anyways, sorry for being so harsh in my latest reviews of your work. I meant well.

Maki-Chan wrote:1.Canvas of colors,
splashed across an ocean,
sunlight becomes black.

That one is by far my favourite! It's awesome! There's just something about it!

Maki-Chan wrote:2.
Enormas titans,
carring the sky above,
watching those below.

Hmm...not sure how I feel about this one. It has no meaning.

Maki-Chan wrote:3.
Pillows of white,
fluffy castles above us,
floating in the wind.

Heehee, that one makes me feel amused. No idea why.

Maki-Chan wrote:4.
A silver platter
glowing in the darkened sky,
night light of the earth.

Second fave. I love the moon.

Maki-Chan wrote:5.
mirror of clear blue,
reflecting sunlight to all,
giving life to man.

Hhhmm...kind of random, but I still like it.

Well, these were quite good. I really liked them.
Keep writing,
Ayra

Remember, a haiku doesn't HAVE to be 5-7-5. You can play with the syllable count and line breaks if you want to; you'll find a lot more freedom in that.

Each haiku you have here is about a specific thing. I think that's perfectly find, and a good exercise in concise, original description. The problem is that they're all sentence fragments or loosely connected phrases. Work on writing in complete sentences (not a requirement, but a good idea).

-Colleen

Lovely.
<3

I love it when i see someone with true understanding of haiku.
The understanding that they are suppose to be about nature and the earth.
There great

alright everyone! 1. is a sunset 2. are mountains 3. clouds 4. the moon 5. a lake
thanks!

I didn't know that haikus can be different thatn just 5-7-5 so thank you!




I know Haikus are suppost to be about nature! so thank you!