Seduction

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Mods feel free to move this if its too graphic...
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Seduction.

Enticing words roll gently from luscious lips.
Formations by hand are presented as scripts.
Permeating the mind with succulent dreams,
Often times, with climatic screams.

Thoughts which are quenching to the thirst,
Drink them in, until you burst.
This creates a hunger for even more.
What further seduction could be in store?

Lightly they stroke every metaphor and cleft.
They penetrate all voids until there are none left.
Pheromones release into deepest regions of thought.
A symphony of orgasmic ecstasy is skillfully wrought.

The psyche pulsates and is shook to the core.
What human can resist the exhilaration, I implore?
A surge of consciousness comes gushing out.
What a thrilling interlude, this, without a doubt.

The mind relaxes and takes in a deep breath.
The ravenous hunger is now put to death.
No need to worry, there's no need to repent.
Intellect now sated from the heavenly event.
To you perceptive reader, I bequeath my history...




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I don't have much time, and I'll review this more thoroughly but:

Never EVER under any circumstances apologize for your writing. Ever. Erotic poetry is just as valid as any other form. You don't need to apologize for yourself here.
Sing lustily and with a good courage. Beware of singing as if you were half dead, or half asleep; but lift up your voice with strength.




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I was expecting a lot worse, aspecially when I saw it was rated R.
Under any circumstances, never feel bad about this, or your writing.
This was intense, gripping, and just a tad creepy (I mean that in a good way
if there is a good way).

Good luck!

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