No Title, Need Ideas, Short so Help me

I from the east
You from the west
Me being pale
You being black
I see no problem to this--I hope you don’t either

I have you in my mind all the time
And you have me in yours too
But it is the world around us
That influences our thoughts
And one day I hope to cross the boundary
That my parents have set
So that we both will be happy
One day, one way

This isn't the greatest poem ever written, but we can live with that, right?

"We come from two different places
I from the east
You from the west"

Redundancy central. Get rid of the first line.

"Our skin colors do not match
Me being pale
You being black"

Another repeat...

"I see no problem to this
I hope you don’t either"

Blend these two lines together by using a hyphen.

"But it is the world around us
That influences our thoughts"

These two lines have nothing to do with any of the lines around them. Perhaps move them after the next two lines.

"And one day I hope to break the boundary
That my parents have set"

Just a question- how do you break a boundary? You say nothing about a fence. Say "cross".

"But yours have opened"

This line is confusing and seems to come out of nowhere. Either fix it or delete it...I'm leaning towards the delete side.

"So that we both will be happy"

See, this last line really just kinda stops abruptly, and leaves us thinking 'did she forget to add in the last lines?" FIX IT FIX IT FIX IT!

lol.

:shoots you:

LOL i know it wasn't the best but you didn't have to KILL IT

:buries the poem:

RIP