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Uh......... not sure what to call it, but it is fantasy, I promise :) ^o^V

Nova jerked up, banging her head on the low ceiling. That stupid dream is going to keep me up all night. She thought angrily. It was the one where Paris was abducted by the strange little fur balls. It used to be funny. Now it was just annoying.

“Hey, pretty lady. Time to get up.”

Nova turned to see Paris smiling through her only window. She folded her arms and scowled at him.

“What do you want?”

“I was just coming to tell you that I’ve successfully mutated some of the seeds.”

“I’ll be right out.”

Nova flung the covers off and shot across the room grabbing her notebook. This is great! Now we actually have a chance of surviving in this forsaken…

There was a cough behind her. Nova turned to see Paris still at her window. She leaned up from her desk, her jaw tightening.

“What?”

“I was just wondering…” he paused, his mouth widening into a grin. “do you always wear such striking colors?”

“Get away from me, you pervert!”

“Hey, I’m an innocent victim here. You’re the one who said okay-”

Nova slammed the window in his face, jerking the blind down. Of all the sick perverted things- one day I’m just going to-

“Calm down, Nova. You know he didn’t mean it.”

“Shut up, Abital. I know what I’m talking about.”

Nova ignored the stretching woman, jerking on her jumpsuit. Abital was boarding with her simply because she was the only other female in the group. Not that sharing a room makes that big of a difference. She seems all too eager to fulfill her role here. Nova thought savagely, storming out the door.

Abital, to put it simply, was supposed to help populate the planet. The team would have insisted that Nova do the same, except she had told them she was infertile. To the extent of her knowledge, she figured she wasn’t. All her relatives had a large healthy family, except her parents. They lived in the city, and as they told her when she was younger, it simply was not economic to have more than three children. Nova felt a pang of guilt. The team always believes me. That always puzzled her, and made her feel terrible for taking advantage of them.

Nova pushed her thoughts away, trying to focus on the task at hand. Getting worked up would solve nothing. She trusted the team, the team trusted her. If Abital died, tough nails. I’m not like her.

“So, what have we got here?”

Nova plopped her notebook on the table, peering at the few sprouts in the greenhouse. A few of them had blossomed during the week. Looks like my supplement actually worked this time.

“I’ve been testing them in different soils and various types of sand. They seem to do best in this.”

Nova looked at the small cup Paris held out to her. The first impression she got was blue sugar. She took it, holding it to the light.

“What is it?”

“I don’t know. I found it lying on the ground about a mile from here.”

Nova would was dubious about this strange new crystal like substance, but didn’t doubt Paris. She knew when he was serious, and when he just wanted to mess with her. Paris snapped his fingers. Here comes the lightning. Nova thought with a sigh.

“There was something else I wanted to show you.”

He grabbed a telescope from the desk and walked out of the greenhouse, pulling Nova with him. She winced in the light. The day was as terribly hot as ever. The only clouds they had encountered came from the east, and they were wispy little things that provided neither shade or rain. Nova was growing to hate them.

“There, see it? Something on the horizon.”

Nova took the proffered telescope, and aimed where his finger pointed.
Oh, that.
She handed the spyglass back to him, nodding.

“Yeah, I saw that earlier this week. Do you think we should investigate?”

Nova knew better than to take command. Unfortunately her group was very chauvinistic like that.

“I think we should.”

“Did you tell Horsa?”

“No. I was going to talk to him tonight.”

“How about now?”

What a dork. Always waiting ‘till last minute. Nova shook her head, jotting their findings in her notebook. The prospect of leaving her mundane job to investigate the strange sparkle on the horizon was more than a welcome change. Maybe we’ll find something useful. In a few moments, Paris was back. His eyes said everything.

“I’ll be right there.”
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I don't know, maybe this should go under science fiction. It's too early to tell.
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Ooh, this is good, Seraph! My only complaint is that you introduce too many characters too quickly. They're good characters, but Nova should have more in-depth interactions with them before moving on to the next character. Then again, I'm positive I'll get to know these characters better in up-coming chapters, so no real worries there.

Nice job!
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No no no, Kyte, there IS a fantasy element here, I promise. I can't tell you when how or why at the moment, because that would give everything away, and, well, you'll see in a couple of posts :):):):):)

Thanks Fangala :D I was going for a 'normal day' kind of thing. I was trying to keep the intro's to a minimum. :D:D:D:D:D

Do you guys have any suggestions for a name? I think I should wait a couple of chapters before naming it :D:D:D:D:D:D
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Nice work!
It takes me right into the story.
I like it but the only thing that confuses me is the window, so maybe you could clarify that...
Once last thing. For wen she picks up her notebook you should say pluck or some fancy work! :D

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OH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I see why that's confusing now... yeah I'll fix that :D:D:D:D:D:D
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SeraphTree wrote:
Nova flung the covers off and shot across the room grabbing her notebook. This is great! Now we actually have a chance of surviving in this forsaken…

I think there should be a comma after 'grabbing'.



Very nice! Like Gwen, er, sorry Gwen, Genevieve said, the story pulled me right in :)
The only thing that bugged me was that Abital's purpose was to populate the earth...! It's probably just me, being the prude that I am, but that idea is kind of irksome. Especially since you didn't explain why...but that will probably come later.

Unfortunately, I have no suggestions for a tile, but if you post more, I might. This was kind of short so it was hard to get an idea of what it was about, you know?

Overall this was quite good. :)
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NO!!! Please come! There's cake, uh, I need some company!!!!!!!
(your quote)

I'm sorry it bothers you Ayra. :( That situation is part of a chain of events, and is very relavent to the story. And yes, everything will be explained... in the next post I'm about to put up :)

Also, I'm basing part of this on an activity from Econ, and a dream I had... my that's going to be strange. Any way, it's an "End of the world" kind of thing.
Don't worry, my story has nothing to do with the END, otherwise I wouldn't have told you that. :D:D:D:D:D:D:D
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Ayra wrote:
SeraphTree wrote:
Nova flung the covers off and shot across the room grabbing her notebook. This is great! Now we actually have a chance of surviving in this forsaken…

I think there should be a comma after 'grabbing'.



Very nice! Like Gwen, er, sorry Gwen, Genevieve said, the story pulled me right in :)
The only thing that bugged me was that Abital's purpose was to populate the earth...! It's probably just me, being the prude that I am, but that idea is kind of irksome.
:D:D:D


You're twelve - you have a right to be a prude. You SHOULD be a prude. If you believed your role was to populate this planet I'd be incredibly worried.

Seraph, I enjoyed this story a lot. There were a few comma errors and it was just a tiny bit rushed, but I like where it's going. It left me wanting more. :D So, MORE!!!
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Thanks Lyrical.
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Wow, this make me sound so perverted. :(:(:(:(:(:(:(:(:(
I was just trying to show a different point of view on women in this world, because, well, it sounds kind of dumb if all the women can kick butt. I mean, that would make my story sound very unrealisitic. :(:(:(:(:(

Oh, If anyone makes characters like this, I mean no offense. It just seems to be a very common theme X( I find it tiring. X(X(X(X(X(X(X(X(X

I have posted the next part, so........... enjoy!!! :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D
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Heehee lyrical_sunshine! You're right :lol: I should, therefor I am!


Anyways, maybe I will go to heaven after all...:twisted: It depends...what flavour the cake is? Neer.

Oh no! :( :cry: Don't feel perverted! I was just being my typical, prude-ish self, as I should. You know? :wink:
Anyways, I will review your next part! :)
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I like it. It's interesting and doesn't seem cliche yet (although end-of-the-world stories have a possibility of being that way). The character seems realistic and likable so far. The only grammatical error I noticed was:

SeraphTree wrote:That stupid dream is going to keep me up all night. She thought angrily.


should be:

That stupid dream is ging to keep me up all night, she thought angrily.




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SeraphTree wrote:Thanks Lyrical.
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Wow, this make me sound so perverted. :(:(:(:(:(:(:(:(:(
I was just trying to show a different point of view on women in this world, because, well, it sounds kind of dumb if all the women can kick butt. I mean, that would make my story sound very unrealisitic. :(:(:(:(:(


I didn't mean to make you sound perverted. In one of my stories, "Defective," there's kind of a smilar theme. Beautiful women have to marry beautiful men in order to produce beautiful children, and if the child isn't perfect enough, they are killed. I understand what you mean about staying away from cliche characters.

Anyway, I'll go review your next chapter now. :D
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Thanks Lyrical. Sometimes it just seems like that. X(X(X(X :D:D:D:D:D
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