"Antidepressant"

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[pre]Sometimes I sit and wonder how my life could be so depressing
then you came along...
I have no reason to be upset,
you make me smile with all you do.
I can't even stay mad at you.
You are all I want and need.
Hell, you are my antidepressant.
I am smiling now just thinking about you
I can't wait until I can have you more,
I won't have any reason to be upset
because you are the best antidepressant I have ever had.[/pre]
Lucy




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this is great, what a neat way to write about a friend. i so like this.
your friend is lucky to have someone like you .

kim




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this was fun to read, off the beaten path.
it put a smile on my face. so it must be good.




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I rather liked your poem. I liked the way you called the person an "antidepressant". The one thing I might suggest would be to change the first line. It seems a little "floaty"...just, out there with no purpose. i would expand on it a little for example: With all the hurt and pain in the world
i used to wonder how life could be so blue
and
depressing
and then you came along...

don't use that exactly but something along those lines would be good i think. nice job!
~abby~
cross the wall? nobody crosses the wall!
-stardust



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