The Dragon's Rage Chapter 2

K so I've looked over your guys' suggestions and im gonna fix my story up a bit.

Chapter 2

John: Lets go everyone!

the small squad of 4 climbed the very steep mountain to fight the dragon.

Jimmi: okay John, I think you might be a little... COMPLETELY INSANE!!!

John: Why do you say that?

Jimmi: Oh, no reason just the fact that we went to this time for research,

and now you made us go and fight some dragon...

John: well I had a perfec.... *gets cut off*

Jimmi: no I'm not done, and this dragon has been terorizing this town for

the past 50 years, and it killed those other 6 people with one swipe, and all

we have no equipment to go fight this dragon with, so all we have in out

great fighting party is... A dumbass leader who thinks he can slay a dragon,

a silent girl who no one knows anything about, a crack addicted professor,

and me, the comic relief, and we are supposed to go fight a dragon with a

map that shows that the dragon lives on the other side of an ENTIRE

MOUNTAIN RANGE!!!!!

John: But just imagine how great it will feel to be a hero

Jimmi: I swear John, if this dragon doesn't kill you, I so will

Shyrl: .....

Professor: Heh Heh... *Snorts extra crack from pocket* yeah lets go kill the dolphin

Jimmi: its a dragon, nice going great leader

*back at the town*

Random guy #1: hey whats up

Random guy #2: i finally got some people to go fight the dragon

#1: wow they must be complete morons

#2: yeah they really were, i gave them the map to the cave and thats it

#1: wow, they might be able to do it

#2: yeah they just might....

Both: HAHAHAHAHA!!!!!!

*back on the steep mountain*

John: finally we got to the top of the mountain

Jimmi: yeah only 27 more to go!!!!!

Shyrl: .....

Professor: hey i bet i can snort this dirt... *SNOOOOOOORT* ah man i feel better now

Jimmi: Just kill me now

John: come on, we need to get this dragon

Jimmi: ok i just thought of something, we have a leader that is a complete

dumbass, a main character that NEVER talks, and the comic relief guy is the

only sane one in the group... this author must be a complete retard.

John: what? what author?

Jimmi: what oh never mind...

Professor: HEY look over there!

Jimmi: yeah theres an injured guy

Professor: not that, its a giant chicken patty... mine i called it

Jimmi: okaaaaay, well either way we need to go help that guy.

John: no no let me handle this, we need to go help that guy (he said this very heroicly)

END OF CHAPTER 2

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ok, so i modified the format a bit, i think its a little better, i kinda wanna get throuh this story, cuz the sequal is gonna be awesome, but this next chapter id gonna be great... trusy me, i just need enough time to write it.... k so anyway bye bye

Haha this one was wayy funnier. I love your sense of humor. Something I can't really get into my writing.

However I have tried to write comedy
Check it out and make sure you leave a comment:

topic21507.html

and a parody I wrote:

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Now on to your writing. It's much better, easier to read and I can see that the script format has helped make this story look and sound better.

However I can tell you haven't had much experience in writing scripts. Go on the Scripts section on this site and read other people's to get a better gist at how they are written.

Professor: Heh Heh... *Snorts extra crack from pocket* yeah lets go kill the dolphin

Laughed my ass off after I read that.

happy halloween
-icy.

Im not really into the script format but easier to understand this way also to me it seemed a bit random but not really in a bad way I like the changes you made and i think i like where this story's going i hope you continue.

i am not used to reading in this form, but your story is great, i love your sensed of humour. great story.

kim