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Repunzal's Story

BigBadBear · 2007-10-30T22:32:49Z

Hey! Uh, I don't know if this is a Narrative Poem, so I just put it here because it sounded like what this poem is about. I just finished this poem, so tell me what you like about it pretty please!!! _______________________ Life in the tower Isn’t as good as it seems. No royal prince will come Oh that joy that that would bring! My name is Repunzal And my parents locked me away. Boy, do I need a haircut My hair is starting to fray. My godmother said I was too dangerous My parents agreed to the tower. And now I wait, sitting alone Hour by hour. Sometimes I dream Of a prince and his steed. They come to rescue me And I would be freed. And then I wake up And see I'm alone. Oh prince! I need you! You can call me on my cell phone! And I woke up And to my surprise, the prince was there! Oh what joy I felt that day, he asked me to thrown down my hair. I gasped; how could he know? Was he a stalker, by knowing about my hair? I shouted to him, “Go away and never return!” And he said, “But you are a princess, lowly and fair!” I laughed and said, “Oh you stupid knight! Always telling us how we look! I am not as blonde as you think! I can cook!” The prince seemed confused By my sudden anger with him. Shouldn’t I be grateful? He thought, “Man, she could use a trim!” I huffed and looked away, “Repunzal! Throw down your hair!” I laughed and spit on the ground, And saw the prince saying a prayer. And then he left, Much to my surprise. Yeah, that is how a real princess Takes care of the guys!

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Fri Nov 23, 2007 9:22 pm

Maybe says... · Fri Nov 23, 2007 9:22 pm

I'm not good at critiquing poetry, but this was really cute and made me giggle. Something i don't do often while reading. So i congratulate you on that.

Keep it coming! I can't wait to read more of your work!

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