A Goodbye

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TheEccentricScribe
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Tue Oct 30, 2007 4:06 am
TheEccentricScribe says... · Tue Oct 30, 2007 4:06 am
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Wed Oct 31, 2007 3:08 pm
Sureal says... · Wed Oct 31, 2007 3:08 pm
I like it. :)

Although, I can't help thinking that stanza 4, line 1 finishes a word early. Couldn't you move 'love' up a line? (So that it reads, 'Maybe there in the stars the one you love/waits for you, but until then').
I wrote the above just for you.
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