A poem

Miss was at the blackboard writing with her chalk, when suddenly she stooped in the middle of her talk.
She snapped her fingers-snap!snap!snap!
pay attention, children, and i'll tell you how to rap.

She picked up a pencil, she started to tap.
All together children, now, clap!clap!clap!
Just get the rythem just get the rhymejust get the beat.
Drum it with you fingers, stamp it with your feet.

I really like this but I think you need to tidy up your grammar and add a few more stanzas. Here's some changes I'd make -

Miss was at the blackboard writing with her chalk, [I'd have a line break here.] when suddenly she [s]stooped[/s] stopped in the middle of her talk.
She snapped her fingers-snap!snap!snap!
pay attention, children, and [s]i'll[/s] I'll tell you how to rap.

She picked up a pencil, she started to tap.
All together children, now, clap!clap!clap!
Just get the [s]rythem[/s] rhythm, just get the rhymejust [You need a space between rhyme and just and perhaps a comma after just.] get the beat.
Drum it with you fingers, stamp it with your feet.

Overall, I think this is good. It has a catchy, fast paced rhythm, your rhyme is effective and it's very entertaining.

I think Kitty picked up most of the errors I saw. But the over all is fun and fast paced but I think it could be longer maybe. Anyway Good Job!

Wesley's Score: for the rapping teacher and an overall score of 1/2 !

P.s Oh yea! Welcome To YWS!!!!!

Those above me have already corrected your punctuation and grammar and spelling and such, so there isn't much of a need for me to comment on that. But I can say that I did enjoy it!

It was fast paced and had me wanting to read the next few words immediately. I just wish it was a bit longer. I really like it!

Keep on writin',

Lee-chan

It's... cute. But it isn't really poetry. This might be lyrics, but poetry [to me, and to others I am sure] has more behind it than words. It has a meaning, and emotions, and something I can feel. It wasn't bad, it's just not what I would call poetry.

I really liked this. It was quick-paced and cute, although it needs a bit of editing for grammar and punctuation.

Mel