Drowning (Just the chorus)

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I wasn't waving,
I was drowning,
In a sea of all
That I'd done wrong.

Did you think I was laughing?
When I was actually crying?
How could you not see,
That I was dying?
How could you not see,
That I was dying?
when there's nowhere to go, it's time to grow up.




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Cool! If that song came out I'd buy it! Wow! :D :D :D




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Awesome! Are there verses to go with it? I'd love to read them if there were...
The robbed that smiles, steals something from the thief. ~William Shakespeare, Othello
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yes. i think verses would be wonderful.




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I think verses would be great to, only because you can get a better idea of what the chorus is about by it's verses. Don't like you decide if you want to buy a house by looking at its surrondings.




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it's a bit short to critique, but verses would either make it or break it (forgive the cliched phrase) i'd love to read them, too.



It had a perfectly round door like a porthole, painted green, with a shiny yellow brass knob in the exact middle. The door opened on to a tube-shaped hall like a tunnel: a very comfortable tunnel without smoke, with panelled walls, and floors tiled and carpeted, provided with polished chairs, and lots and lots of pegs for hats and coats—the hobbit was fond of visitors. The tunnel wound on and on, going fairly but not quite straight into the side of the hill —The Hill, as all the people for many miles round called it—and many little round doors opened out of it, first on one side and then on another.
— JRR Tolkien