Please be Seated

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Please be Seated

What is a chair?
A relaxing seat?
A dining place?
For I was sitting on one as I ate,
And wondered what would come to pass
If there was no chair to support my lap.
And how terrible it would be
If one tried to sit down to read
But found they fell to the floor?

How would a chairless world run,
With no place to rest the legs of not one
of many bipeds?
Our muscles would bulge with the strain
Of having to stand up all day,
And though our physique would be buff,
At what cost would we huff and puff
To stand on tired legs?

So the next time you take a seat
At a table with bread and meat,
Say a thanksgiving prayer for your chair,
And thank God that it was, indeed, there.
My main project until Script Frenzy is an experiment using blog posts between four characters as episodes of a common story. You can read this work as it progresses at http://knowallchronicles.blogspot.com/.




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LOL, very funny!! :lol: :lol: Nice rhymes - nothing constructive, but I did like this!!
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Very nice. The rhymes (sp?) were very creative. I never really got a chance to thank my chair for all of its hard work. Thank you, chair.
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Is this really lyrical poetry, though? It sounds more like a satire or something. What category would it go under on this website, because most of my poems are whimsical like this.
My main project until Script Frenzy is an experiment using blog posts between four characters as episodes of a common story. You can read this work as it progresses at http://knowallchronicles.blogspot.com/.




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Ahaha your making me hungry! :o


Awesome job!
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Ha ha. very funny. Really liked this.
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Is there anything I could do to make this better, or is it fine as is?
My main project until Script Frenzy is an experiment using blog posts between four characters as episodes of a common story. You can read this work as it progresses at http://knowallchronicles.blogspot.com/.




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What is a chair?
A relaxing seat?
A dining place?

I'm not too sure about the questions, it seems you could use images to demonstrate that you are puzzling over it, rather than simply asking.

But I thought you did a very good job with images, and with subtle rhyming. :]




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I'm sharing the same thoughts as everyone I think.

It was very cute and funny. Some of it seemed a bit forced but it was still very nice.


Keep it up!


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I enjoyed the poem. I always find it entertaining to find people who are able to successfully write 'outside of the box'.
I think some of the rhymes were a little forced. It also might have beenbetter if you kept the point of view in third person or first person. The second person view makes the message sound like a direct moral; it's almost a little too obvious. I know it's hard to write an ending, being horrible at it myself, but I think it's always best to stayaway from the second P.O.V. It's only my own opinion though. I enjoyed the poem and I will think more about the things I take for granted now on. :P



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