The corpses are piled high around. Blood carpets the floor and flames scorch away the last remnants of humanity. The screams of the damned echo in my head. I smile. I am home.
6/10;
it was good, but not thought-provoking. (: Good though.
Had I the heavens embroider'd cloths,
I would spread the cloths under your feet.
But I being poor, have only my dreams,
So tread softly, for you tread on my life.
sorry for those of you who can't read it...here it is....
Life
was radical
right after I met
the monster.
Later, life
became
harder,
complicated.
Ultamitely,
a living
hell.
Like swimming
against a riptide,
walking
the wrong
direction in the fast
lane of a freeway,
waking
from teh sweetest
dreams to find yourself
in the middle of a
nightmare.
9/10
I really liked it and the train of thoughts was really sweet. Only downside was a few mispellings. Lovely though. (:
Had I the heavens embroider'd cloths,
I would spread the cloths under your feet.
But I being poor, have only my dreams,
So tread softly, for you tread on my life.
Awww. That is really cute. I give it the big One Oh! 10/10
Rite 2 meh lyk dis...and I shoot you.~Unknown
I'm the future of America. Be afraid. Be very afraid~Unknown
If you're blonde and you know it clap your hands *Snap* *snap*
If you're reading this...you're finished reading.
Oh my goodness Thunderdude. It is a quote from "The Notebook". Anyway yours would be 5/10. Do you know how many times that I have seen that or heard that or even done that?!?! A Lot! lol.
Rite 2 meh lyk dis...and I shoot you.~Unknown
I'm the future of America. Be afraid. Be very afraid~Unknown
If you're blonde and you know it clap your hands *Snap* *snap*
If you're reading this...you're finished reading.
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