sum quod eris

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Woah. I read anything this good on this site in my short time of being here.
I loved the long lines, but short stanzas.
This poem flowed really well.
You have a stunning vocabulary and have used it well. I don't really know what else to say =/

I loved this line:

spend on a wide choice of wallpaper
to brighten no choice of walls.


Yeah...this is a terrible critque I know but I really can't think of any words to describe the poem.

Oh and I loved the Latin title.

~Ferris AKA Tara~
“Promise me you'll never forget me because if I thought you would I'd never leave.”




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Ouch. No need to beat around the bush, Brad -- "the knife so poised and steady to the throats of the ones I love." The language was somehow both elegant and brutal. I felt like I was the person that had wronged you completely when I read this. Pretty damn good. Classic Brad, I might say. I've missed your poems like this.
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