The flower and the pearl

The Flower and the Pearl

One day, a beautiful and fragrant flower with attractive colors met a pearl that lives in the bottom of the sea and has none of these characteristics. Both got acquainted with each other.

The flower said: “Our family is large; roses and daises are members of the family. And there are many other species that are various and countless; each has a distinctive scent, appearance etc." Suddenly, a tingle of distress appeared on the flower.

"Nothing accounts for sorrow in your talk; so why so depressed?" asked the Pearl

"Human beings deal with us carelessly; they slight us. They don’t grow us for our sake but to get pleasure from our fragrance and beautiful appearance. They through on the street or in the garbage bag can after we are dispossessed of the most valuable properties; brilliance and fragrance.” The flower sighed.

And then the flower said to the pearl: “speak to me about your life! How do you live? How do you feel it? You are buried in the bottom of the sea.”

The pearl answered: “Although I have none of your distinctive colors and sweet scents, human think I am precious. That’s what upraises my value in their thought. I live in a thick shell isolated in the dark seas. However, I’m happy and proud to be in safe zone far wanton and mischievous hands and still the humans consider me highly valuable”




Do you know what the flower and the pearl symbolized

The flower is the unveiled woman (who shows her charms) and the pearl is the veiled women (who conceals her beauties)

Think about it

Hello!

Even though your story is written like a fable or myth, I think you should show instead of tell. For example:

"One day, a beautiful and fragrant flower with attractive colors met a pearl that lives in the bottom of the sea and has none of these characteristics."

In stead of saying that it was beautiful, and its colors were attractive, talk about the colors and let the readers decide on their own that it's beautiful and attractive.

I think you should describe how the flower and the pearl met, because that's something that doesn't normally happen. Maybe the flower is growing on the edge of the ocean, and looking down into the water and that's how it sees the pearl? Or maybe when a human was done with it, they dropped the flower into the sea? Something like that.

“Our family is large; roses and daises are members of the family. And there are many other species that are various and countless; each has a distinctive scent, appearance etc."

Etc. is not for dialogue. You could have the flower say et cetera, but that also doesn't flow well. I'd just say "each has a distinctive scent, and appearance."

Your last sentence in the story is missing a period.

Thanks for posting this! Let me know if you have any questions about my review.

They through on the street

Did you mean "They throw us on the street."?

It's short and simple. I think that's one of the reasons I liked it. Some people just go on and on when they want to make a point, but I think you did a good job.

The only thing that I can say is that you should be careful to not be sterotypical. Using that flower as the "charming" woman is fine, but it almost seems like you think any woman who opens herself up to other people will be misused. It seems like they must be at one end of the spetrum, without any in the middle--either completely "out there" or totally hidden. For me, that seems a little too simplistic.

But I think you got your idea across, and it's a point that more people should consider. I wish you hadn't given the answer right away though because I was trying to figure it out and then the answer was right there. Is there a way that you could hide it?

Well, nice job.

I 'ill try to do the best as soon as I got time

I did'nt hide the answer because I knew no one could solve it!






~ayman~

I really like this piece, the fable hidden within it is pretty relevant in modern society. Well done! Just remember to proof-read your work