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The Curse of Mortality

Anonymous · 2005-03-06T21:23:33Z

The Curse of Mortality Some day we’ll all take out last breath, And allow life to succumb to death. Someday we’ll all say goodbye, For everyone at some point must die. All life is doomed to fade, All goodbyes must be bade. Nothing lasts forever, Some things will last for never. Some flowers never bloom, Some things never feel life before their doom. Tears are always meant to be shed, Whether for the living or for the dead. Death doesn’t hurt the ones who die, It hurts the ones who must say goodbye. Though to those who feel sorrow, Fear not for there is always tomorrow. Another chance for one to die, Another chance for a painful goodbye.

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Sat May 28, 2005 2:10 pm

Unknown says... · Sat May 28, 2005 2:10 pm

Very nice poem, really, more then just nice.
It has something magical to it.
I really like it.
(And I'm jealous because I can't write that kind of great poems).

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Sat May 28, 2005 3:34 pm

Chevy says... · Sat May 28, 2005 3:34 pm

I'd have to agree with Brad...heh...

The rhyming scheme was decent...did seem disconjointed or anything. But seriously,like I and so many others have said one million times, you shouldn't make serious poems rhyme...I mean, it takes away from it. And try to use imagery...this poem just stayed on one flat surface. It didn't go up or down...kind of monotnous.

when there's nowhere to go, it's time to grow up.

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Love is so short, forgetting is so long.
— Pablo Neruda

The Curse of Mortality

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