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What happoned to 'You and Me'?

JC · 2007-05-27T04:49:09Z

We used to be so perfect. A lot of people would call it love. I just called it trust. Then something happened along the way that put an end to all of that. I just want to know why. Why wasn’t I enough? Did you even know what you were doing? Since that day my life has turned into a story. The kind I would read and cry myself to sleep thinking about. Thinking it would never be me, not as long as I had you. But it seems the exact opposite has happened. You became my storybook. What happened to us? We used to be so perfect. People would see us walking down the street, and think, “God, aren’t they cute?” Every night would be tinted with thoughts of you, and every morning would overflow with them. We were each others everything. Until her. The one who you used to be everything to, the one that used to be your everything. She came and showed me what it’s like to lose you. But you wouldn’t let me know, you didn’t leave me. But you couldn’t tell her no. Words can’t say how much it kills to live everyday with the knowledge that I was never enough for you. Even worse was what you were willing to do. What happened to us? Where did we go wrong? Why did I forgive you? She’s coming back, I know it. Someday she’ll be back, and she’s going to want you. That I can promise. Maybe you’ve learned, who knows? Maybe you’ll have the strength to tell her no for once, and people can continue to look at us thinking, “God, aren’t they cute?” Or maybe I’ll be stuck in the background thinking “What happened to ‘you and me’?” We used to be so perfect.

Raaayna808

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Fri Aug 13, 2010 4:03 am

Raaayna808 says... · Fri Aug 13, 2010 4:03 am

I really liked this story.
I liked it because it relates to me...

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sara13

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Sun Aug 15, 2010 12:52 am

sara13 says... · Sun Aug 15, 2010 12:52 am

This was very smartly done with the repeating sentences and how you created the strong image of how nothing was changing. The only thing i wish would have been to know how strong the bond between the couple was even more. A little bit more description or another sentence or two about how they use to be. That would (for me) set up the rest of the story into perfect motion. Keep up the good work.
Well done