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Feelings


I'm in love with a guy who doesn't even know I exist. He looks through me like wind. Why doesn't he have feelings for me like I do for him? When I close my eyes I see his face. When I'm in a quiet room I hear his voice. I can't get my mind to think of anyone but him.
So I ask again from the bottom of my heart, why doesn't he have feelings for me like I do for him?




Her

She sits alone in her cold dark room. Wondering what she did to deserve to be treated the way they treat her. Never seeing the light of day, never knowing what a hug or kiss feels like. Never to hear laughter.
Her skin looks black and blue from the bruises that cover her body. The pain she feels, the hate they give, kill her from the inside out. She can't take it anymore and with her last few breaths she takes her own life.
Everything is written in the sand but, it just depends on how you read it!
lot of love
erin
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Both of this poems have potential but they're a little short and they need to be written in poetry form. Try to form a structure and then mold the words to it and I'm sure more ideas will come to you. Or if you want to keep them short, perhaps check out the structure of Haikus and use that.
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