Tamagotchi Got Chi...PSYCHE!

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whence
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Thu May 17, 2007 2:38 am
whence says... · Thu May 17, 2007 2:38 am
"Forget You!", screamed behind hand
Your so nineties, I direct to your hand

Are you afraid of the dark? Or just boy bands?
Barred clichés suppressed by Gak in hand

'Ice Ice Baby ', echoes of abysm-soaked sand
held in palm of mind, electrolytes of hand

now gallops in the pick-a-number man
R-E-D spewed across B-L-U-E hand

Hey Arnold, from the skirt weilding land
football held by neck rather then hand

I'm breaking out my nostalgia-makin' gland
Signing off 'Remembered', with stale trend stained hand.
Last edited by whence on Sat May 19, 2007 11:06 pm, edited 3 times in total.
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whence
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Sat May 19, 2007 9:29 pm
whence says... · Sat May 19, 2007 9:29 pm
I know bumps are frowned upon, but hasn't anyone anything to say about this at all?
The good parts of a book may be only something a writer is lucky enough to overhear or it may be the wreck of his whole damn life — and one is as good as the other.
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something euclidean
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Sat May 19, 2007 9:58 pm
something euclidean says... · Sat May 19, 2007 9:58 pm
I like the "talk to the hand" reference and the title tons. I get such a kick out of this poem I'm not sure I have anything serious to say about it, though ;]
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Sat May 19, 2007 10:46 pm
oregongirl says... · Sat May 19, 2007 10:46 pm
Hey! :) This was pretty good. I thought from what you're trying to say I think you should make it longer. Well except for that it was pretty good. I had no idea what you were talking about but oh well :D Good job! :elephant:
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Sun May 20, 2007 5:52 am
Skye says... · Sun May 20, 2007 5:52 am
How could I resist a title like this? ;)

The only complaint I have is the "hand/hand" rhyme in the first stanza. I realize it's a ghazal, and that rhyming can be scarce, but perhaps a little more can be done with this?

Nevertheless, I found this very enjoyable -- it spoke to the '90s girl in me, back when we partied like it was 1999! *boogies*

Sweet.
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